riding the tide
swirling peach blossoms
- laughter on the shore
the black squirrel at dawn
digging up tulips
that clown
is my bodhisattva
-his pinwheel spinning
noises under the hood
an incessant treadmill
souls coming, going
a funeral pyre
licks the moon
exhaling, in cool night air
wind chimes
inhaling poppies-
bombs over afghanistan
come home
breathing you in
intoxicating
a mental note
to call his mother
graveyard walk
a deep sigh...
deciding to go on alone
the long journey
of a falling leaf-
do it again
the old neighborhood
city streets wet with rain
thunderheads
discussing their son
he's caught in the moon
plum wine and cedar smoke
- drifting off to raindrops
empty swing
between being and non-being
still swinging
skirting wakefulness and dreams
furry buddha licks my face
her father's grizzled beard
pops the red balloon
-cherry blossoms
startled sparrows...
her fluttering hand fan
a simple breakfast
as we wait for dawn
green tea and birdsong
a double kigo
sometimes hits the spot
two tracks
one follows another
but wanders along the way
unsettled mind
telling secrets to the worry doll
withered lotus
daydreams linger
into darkness
evening downpour
a rainbow flag
midnight prayers
amidst the echos
of Quetzalcoatl
echoes in the canyon
she won't return my calls
long distance-
we finish each other's
sentence
autumn deepens
companion book explains
lanterns set afloat
-my last friend
the moon
lights out!
a toast to morning glory
looking over
this dewy path
fleeting autumn
to be a flower or a boat
the path narrows
brush strokes-
the current quickens
it's pace
on wet canvas
the butterfly's flutter
under rainy skies
barberry leaves more red
yellow blossoms
warrior's heart
bursting from the surprise of birds
A kasen completed April 24, 2009
Authors:
bandit--
verses 4, 8, 12, 16, 19, 23, 27, 31, 35
bluetoque--
verses 2, 6, 9, 13, 17, 21, 24, 28, 32
el coyote--
verses 1, 5, 10, 14, 18, 22, 25, 29, 33
govindajohn--
verses 3, 7, 11, 15, 20, 24, 28, 32, 36
verses 3, 7, 11, 15, 20, 24, 28, 32, 36
73 comments:
Well done, lads-aim for the 'moon'!
noises under the hood: was that you John?
"where she lay her head..." did we get out of sync there- shouldn't that be a long one, no season + love?
yes, you're right.
my bad I'll revise
Well, I changed it up. I think what I added it fits in but if you guys aren't happy with that then just delete those last two entries.
Sorry EC if I screwed things up just delete and go ahead. I'm off for a bit will catch up later.
I really like that stanza bt... lets keep it the way it is... I guess we'll just switch positions, so I'll go second....
thought provoking! ...and prolific. yikes, I need to quit my job to keep up. by the way,"under the hood" wasn't me, I'm in the 3 hole. Work calls but I'll have time to compose late this evening. having fun.
So it's all good then. I'm loving that bodhisattva clown by the way. Turning the dharma pinwheel, so to speak.
No worries on the time thing. I'm busy myself at work this week.
Hey guys. Like the interaction here. Damn good crew!
I've been working in the rural north-ginko-no-renga! Still no blossoms here, but things are starting to green.
I was by the St. Croix river today-glacial rock and bluffs and pines galore. So peaceful.
I'm at the four slot...
...and pinwheel, a spring kigo.
Johnny's a clever lad!
So, Blue'; how do you pronounce 'toque?
toque is pronounced like "too-ck" (long o). Rhymes with kook. It comes from the French. It's how we Canadians refer to our oh-so-important winter hats. You may see it spelled 'touque' as well. It's a silly handle, but I can't seem to part with it.
changed that last entry... it sounded cliche
Hey bandit, No blossom up here either, although I believe we are on the cusp. My walk tonight was absolutely filled with birdsong. And the blue heron has returned to the local pond.
Nice one, El.
Okay so bluetoque is up....
bluetoque
El coyote
john
bandit
blown away! thunderheads and the moon... wow! and...off to raindrops. I feel like a novice.
I 'took' the day off-been napping the last three hours.
I recall swing is a spring kigo...
let me ponder this...
I wonder if we should try swapping around the long and the short stanzas between each contribution? For example, Eric and I swap out, taking turns between the long and the short (as we've done once already), then John and bandit could do the same. Do you think that might help to mix things up a bit?
I wouldn't suggest it as a matter of course; however, John and I have accomplished pre-planned switches without disruption.
I believe I made that suggestion
in our e-mail correspondence so no one would feel "pigeon holed"
to one verse length. Say, a switch halfway, allowing equal opportunity to practice verse lengths or not to carry a load.
A lot of these two-liners could be full fledged 'ku, so to speak.
I'm not taking a role of sabaki here, so its up to you guys.
turdus migatorious will join us soon, creating an odd number, thus everyone would have a chance at both lengths.
When mimi_chan returns, back to even; more than likely others will join the "club", also. Something to consider.
Hey bandit, that sounds great.
Also, there is the rengay format:
3 line-2 line-3-line, repeat-two authors take turns.
And Vince Seward's renghai;
see the link for masago-no-haiku
at Haiku Bandit Society.
In any case, we'll have ample opportunity in future to try different approaches. I'm glad you brought it up. I'd like to do some things where we each submit a line and then choose the best for each position. Some folks don't like that old school approach, though, because typically the selection would be at the whim of one person-
oh, well, we'll see how it goes.
My apologies to Mr. Seward-his name is Vaughn.
To make amends I'll add a link to his site here.
bandit. wanna switch? at what verse? sorry for the spring kigo with swing.
I recall balloon is also a spring kigo-in future, you might want to avoid double kigos, though this one made me laugh out loud!
Leave it, leave it!
kigo kigo
at which verse shall we switch?
No need to apologise to me-I just remember odd things like telephone numbers and stuff-yeah, sure, this time, though in future we could pre-plan. It's my anal nature-read my profile, there, Jacob!
Lemmee see there, Bob-we're halfway, so would I take 19?
I changed a word in my last verse 'cause I repeated yours.
ok, so you take 19 and I'll take 20... to the ageku
Hmm, I had read the kasen format for my spot as: spring season word + blossom. So it should have just been invoking blossom (or bloom?) as it's season word then? Okay, next time. Thanks for your patience.
hmmm.. in retrospect fan seems like a summer kigo.... think I should change it?
coyote... don't change that... I love it!
cool!
it's a fine line, 'toque-yet an ingenious link!
sparrow children-warmth, first warm days; spring kigos.
How do I remember all this stuff?
I can't help myself
Incorrigible!
...can I have that with a side of fries?
You have a message from Gillena at "Renga-HBS'.
Oh nice...I wouldn't have caught that, thanks. I've been visiting the lunch break ever since you put up her link. Very enjoyable.
struggling with: wanders 'along the way' or 'side-to-side'
I like wandering....
my following entry plays on the term wandering, likening it to the wandering mind!
along the way!
just my preference; 'along the way' has a double meaning for me, as though following a spiritual path, yet having trouble adhering to it-the story of my life!
beautiful, El.
I'm off to mines-return this after.
psst, elcoyote, when do you want to switch 'em up?
Lets switch after the next entry... so the entry after withered lotus.. we'll start a new cycle....
eric
blue
john
bandit
sounds good!
Bandit and I just switched...so I think that we'll continue as is. I flew the rainbow flag and he went previous to my post, so the two of you can decide how to switch it up with each other. I'm enjoying everyone's participation very much. I liked "along the way" and "secrets to a worry doll" and "withered lotus"... Very inspired.
think quetzalcoatl sounds good? I was considering using "kami" instead... suggestions?
soft echos of rain kami?
Your instincts don't seem to need refinement, but I like Quetzalcoatl. Mexicano en mi sangre.
I find both equally intriguing. But I'm with John, and I'm thinking Quetzalcoatl doesn't want to be disturbed.
Okay, sounds good! Thanks y'all!
Man, I love checking in and seeing what comes next. Nice one bandit.
Did you know that morning glories can also represent a love metaphor?
I'll see if I can find that reference-probably at Gabi sensai's
World Kigo Database-oh, that reminds me! I'll post another list of references above. Looks like some old and new translations from Japanese included.
nice one bt!
Sorry guys-took me half the day.
Finally stopped trying to be clever and went shasei.
Does this link up ok?
A big sky to a tiny blossom...
Take us home, John.
Agreed, it seems the last kick at the can demands a little more thought. I think it links up rather nicely bandit.
Oh, very nice Bandit! I feel like the guy with a broom at the end of a rose parade. I feel a bit unworthy. This sure has been fun though and pleased with the results!
Bravo! Thanks guys, that was a blast!
Thank you, John.
I re-read that several times.
It elicited a strong feeling in me as though we had conquered an improbable opponent.
I hear the rush of birds wings...
I was also impressed with 'toque's
'lantern's' verse, and el c's 'worry doll'.
These and more are worthy additions
to each of your individual sites.
Let's take a moment to read the finished kasen.
Then, we should cast about these verses to seek a title.
A very satisfying collaboration.
Thank you all.
Here's raising a glass to you three. Thank you, that was quite rewarding. I loved seeing what would come next. Well done!
Skoal!
I'm afraid I can't take credit for the lanterns though. That was elcoyote's light, burning bright.
Of course, we'll list the verses by author.
Did I mention 'two tracks'?
this is absolutely brilliant
D,
Thanks, kiddo, glad you liked it.
These lads are very creative.
So, what do think of this title?:
The long journey of a falling leaf
Guys, what is your input, please?
And let's list verses by handle;
I'll go first, alphabetically.
Morning Bandit-
It reads very nicely. I like the title you've chosen and handles work for me.
Good morning. Hope everyone is having a good weekend. The title works for me, bandit - well-chosen.
sounds good bandit!
Thanks fellas-either you're overly kind or I was lucky in a selection
of title. Better run with it!
So...what's next?
Definately would like to see another kasen here soon-T. Migratorious has agreed to join us.
A myriad of possibilities!
Oh a wonderful series, all :)
thoroughly enjoyable,
including some of the exchanges :)
wishes,
devika
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